Avoid merely reporting a fact. Say more than what is already proven fact. Go further with your ideas. Otherwise, why would your point matter? Original thesis: Hoover's administration was rocked by scandal. Revised thesis: The many scandals of Hoover's administration revealed basic problems with the Republican Party's nominating process. Do not expect to come up with a fully formulated thesis statement before you have finished writing the paper. The thesis will inevitably change as you revise and develop your ideas and that is ok! Start with a tentative thesis and revise as your paper develops.
Here´s a working thesis with potential: you have highlighted an important aspect of the novel for investigation. However, it´s still not clear what your analysis will reveal. Your reader is intrigued but is still thinking, "So what? What´s the point of this contrast? What does it signify?" Perhaps you are not sure yet, either. That´s fine_begin to work on comparing scenes from the book and see what you discover.
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